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Man in the Rain

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Sitting in my kitchen
drops ping off the pain
and as I stared outside
he was walking in the rain

His figure blurred by mist
a shadow way,  way off
his outline steadily bigger
his footsteps never stop

And then without a warning
right in my front yard
he came to a calm halt
and stared, into my heart

Then the shadow turned around
and the rain drops ceased to fall
the sun poked out of clouds
I wondered if he was real at all

The man out in the rain
to this day touched my soul
and every time I hear the drops
I wonder if he'll show
I saw this image [link] by :iconmoxiemyths: and I wanted to write a poem to go with it. Yay!
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briddybear's avatar
A lovely poem of wonderment and love. I do hate it, but I also do not love it. It seems a little chppy, like the rhymes may have been forced. It also seems like it has lines where it does not flow properly. I like the wording! This poem is very good but some of the stanzas could be remastered to make it flow better. With time, you will be a very great writer! Keep up the good work!